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...and then they happened some more. The second part of Chapter 12 will be posted SOON, cross-my-heart-and-hope-to-die pinky-swear.

Date: 2013-01-08 03:52 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] yingtai.livejournal.com
Looking forward to it!

Have been trying to figure out how I'm supposed to feel about Rob. He cares so much about Luca, but ... not enough? I'm glad he found the money this time, but I wish he didn't even wince about sacrificing fencing épées for the protection fee. He doesn't even consider just running away together. I'm hoping he does care and he just can't imagine what Luca's life is really like. Every time I hear Luca being grateful for something my heart breaks a little for him.

Which is all a synonym for ... can't wait to find out more!

Date: 2013-01-12 02:10 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] pierrot-dreams.livejournal.com
Okay, here's the thing about Robert. He's twenty years old and he's a self-centered, spoiled brat. Sure, he might rant about the aristocracy, but he also thoroughly enjoys his wealth and privilege. He's never been asked to sacrifice anything, ever. I realize that he is not a very likable character at the moment, but please trust that he is going to experience a pretty intense emotional growth spurt as the story progresses! (And it's going to be a long story.)

It's interesting that you mention the fencing épée, since that is actually going to become important within the next few chapters. So you get, like, all the attentive reader awards.

I really hope that the frustration of Robert isn't overpowering the story? I don't want to make him TOO unlikable. If it's going in that direction, please don't be afraid to let me know. I love constructive criticism, and let's face it, the only place I'm going to get constructive criticism on an erotic slavery-themed fantasy epic is on LiveJournal...

Date: 2013-01-12 03:21 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] yingtai.livejournal.com
Robert is likable! I liked him in the first chapter, I liked him rushing off to class with his housemates, I even liked him with Boq, and I love every moment he is actually with Luca (they just keep getting better).

But I think maybe I'm getting mixed signals about his commitment to Luca? On the one hand I am deeply reassured by the chill he gets when he remembers Luca waiting to service him, but on the other hand *I* get chills when he balances Luca's well-being against regalia and fencing épées. Maybe if he didn't wince about sacrificing new fencing épées, but gritted his teeth at the humiliation of not being able to bargain when Luca's bruises are at stake, then I wouldn't wonder so much. Not sure what to do about the regalia though.

But please don't take me too seriously? I have really shallow taste in fic, I'm all about loving the characters and the flavor of their ... interactions. The most amazing writing leaves me cold otherwise, and plenty of people don't feel that way. Besides which, it sounds like I should have great expectations for Robert in future, so please don't let my wondering get in the way of his journey!

Date: 2013-01-18 06:49 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] pierrot-dreams.livejournal.com
Oh good! I sometimes worry that I've had these characters in my head for so long I've just lost all perspective. A lot of your concerns are plot points that WILL be addressed in upcoming chapters.

Can I just say, thank you so much for reading and caring so much about this story? Seriously, it's fantastic.

Date: 2013-01-21 05:48 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] yingtai.livejournal.com
Seriously, my privilege. This is my favourite WIP.

Date: 2013-01-26 05:42 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] pierrot-dreams.livejournal.com

I am hugging this comment. With my brain.

Date: 2013-01-08 05:49 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] heliosette.livejournal.com
We' ll hold you to that ; )

Date: 2013-01-12 02:11 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] pierrot-dreams.livejournal.com
New chapter is posted! I am patting myself on the back so hard right now. It's kind of awkward, but I'm doing it anyway.


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